Thread: OT: Need some writing help...(It's slow in Clipland anyway)
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Old 08-23-2005, 01:06 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Re: OT: Need some writing help...(It's slow in Clipland anyway)
You need to get rid of all those "ands" in the 2nd paragraph. Commas can be used when explaining multiple players in the trade. I hope that makes sense.
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