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Old 04-22-2008, 11:54 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Old 04-22-2008, 11:56 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Re: Your work

What the hell, here's one I wrote a loooooong time ago:

Knight in Tarnished Armor
Love can be fleeting, and honor might be all that survives

Crazy to love, crazy to dream
Reality's days pass my doorway plain to see
How is it now, what might it mean?
Duped fool or knight errant, which one is me?

I believed in Joyous Gard, my castle soon to be
I believed in you my love, but Love a fickle fantasy
Bright green blaze set in bluest skies
Now darkening haze obscures my eyes

In the Halls of Joy, or Dens of Pain
Your struggles and doubts were regained anew
Yet my tarnished armor remained the same
Blackened, yes, by some device
What price to pay; I never knew

Love's banner limply hangs, wild winds tore it through
No lady's favor adorns my soul, o Soul!
Verite speaks true to you
Your words a dismal toll
Ringing hollowly through empty halls
Love no longer, fading verses fall in lieu
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Old 04-22-2008, 11:57 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Re: Your work

Guess I'll Wait

Waiting another night
For my next smile
Till my next laugh
Under the morning sun.

I'll wait as tobacco burns
Half falls as ash
Dreamy gray floating
Drifts to the ceiling
Escapes out the window

Coldly I'll stare
Through the blank
Night

Till the ash tray is full
Smeared glass of rum
Rich brown escape

Meshing of gray and blue
Stillness frozen
Waiting...

Waiting for another day.
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Old 04-22-2008, 11:59 AM   #4 (permalink)
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What the hell, here's one I wrote a loooooong time ago:

Knight in Tarnished Armor
Love can be fleeting, and honor might be all that survives

Crazy to love, crazy to dream
Reality's days pass my doorway plain to see
How is it now, what might it mean?
Duped fool or knight errant, which one is me?

I believed in Joyous Gard, my castle soon to be
I believed in you my love, but Love a fickle fantasy
Bright green blaze set in bluest skies
Now darkening haze obscures my eyes

In the Halls of Joy, or Dens of Pain
Your struggles and doubts were regained anew
Yet my tarnished armor remained the same
Blackened, yes, by some device
What price to pay; I never knew

Love's banner limply hangs, wild winds tore it through
No lady's favor adorns my soul, o Soul!
Verite speaks true to you
Your words a dismal toll
Ringing hollowly through empty halls
Love no longer, fading verses fall in lieu
I like it.

Here are some VERY old ones of mine too.

Un-read

A rose my love gave him
Brought tears to my eyes.
Broken heart, a knife across my skin.
I still desire her love.
I'll always remember that rose,
She didn't give me.

My Love

She has stabbed me, and punctured my heart. Taken a
gun, and shot me in the face. Wounds in my body, are
scars forever. Injected poison in my veins, poison of
death. And an illness of weakness. Pain which is so
destructive. Takes over your body and kills you.
Inflicted by love that shot the gun, grabbed the knife
and stabbed, and injected death. But yet, after she
has killed the killed, I still love her.

Looking Out

A little snuggle, on a freezing cold day. A tender
kiss, under the moonlight. A warm little smile, to
show affection. A glow in the eyes, staring at the
beauty. A sweet smelling rose, to show love. A sweet
caress, to show passion. Holding hands, walking side
by side, away from me, in the opposite direction.
Sitting alone on a rock, watching them pass. Tears
forming in my eyes, a storm hits, only above me, lets
the couple live happy. Throwing a rock, as hard as I
can, meaning to hit anything, something, as long as it
hits! A growing despair, a longing for love, real
love. Jumping in the water, meaning to drown.

Going deep

deep...

deep...

down...
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Old 04-22-2008, 12:00 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Re: Your work

Very evocative. It sounds like you've had your share of lousy experiences with women.
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Old 04-22-2008, 12:03 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Very evocative. It sounds like you've had your share of lousy experiences with women.
yes, you know high school. I actually have more about different topics but I don't want to post them all now.
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Old 04-22-2008, 12:05 PM   #7 (permalink)
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Sounds reasonable. If you put a link in your sig mentioning your new personal forum, you should get some more people in here posting their own work too.
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Old 04-22-2008, 02:21 PM   #8 (permalink)
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Re: Your work

Just finished this one. It's on my blog too.

His flow is soundless so he pounds down countless ounces
As outlets, lounging in the midst of those who doubt him
He’s hounded by the wolf he kills with silver bullets
It’s ruthless, bare truth’s mistook for bull****
There’s footprints in the sand but they show no movement
Where’d they move to? No one knows so they blindly follow
Their minds hollow, yearning for a path to knowledge
They’re burned when it’s revealed to be a demagogue
Now they’re forever lost, saying they’ll steel themselves from now on
But the mile’s gone and there is no backtracking
The time’s gone so **** what could have been
It’s over, life moves on so move with the rest
In order to survive, gotta learn to live with regrets
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Nice little hova reference
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Just finished this one. It's on my blog too.

His flow is soundless so he pounds down countless ounces
As outlets, lounging in the midst of those who doubt him
He’s hounded by the wolf he kills with silver bullets
It’s ruthless, bare truth’s mistook for bull****
There’s footprints in the sand but they show no movement
Where’d they move to? No one knows so they blindly follow
Their minds hollow, yearning for a path to knowledge
They’re burned when it’s revealed to be a demagogue
Now they’re forever lost, saying they’ll steel themselves from now on
But the mile’s gone and there is no backtracking
The time’s gone so **** what could have been
It’s over, life moves on so move with the rest
In order to survive, gotta learn to live with regrets
Nice. Glad to see some fellow poets.
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